Military MBAs - Essay feedback on AppMentor


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Veterans pursue MBAs for a number of reasons. The most often cited reason is to transition from the military careers to public/private sector careers. Others pursue their MBA to enrich their career opportunities within the military. A military background offers much in terms of leadership experience and this will be a major asset when writing essays. Whatever the reason, a top-tier MBA has a lot to offer a military applicant.

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Start a project with Nontraditional! Mentor:
Nontraditional
Accepted at: Harvard HBS
Industry Exp: Banking, Engineering, Finance, Military
Gender: Male
Background: United States
 
Mentor Details:   My background allowed me to tell a somewhat different story on my application essays. I came out of the maritime industry where I spent several years as a crewmember on commercial vessels and then worked in management. I was also in the Naval Reserve for eight years. I believe I can add perspective to those who do not come out of the "traditional" MBA applicant mold. Everyone has valuable experiences, and what will set you apart is the ability to tell a compelling story about how those lead you to business school. I was a round 2 admit in 2006. I had put in a hastily prepared application in round 3 the year before and received valuable feedback from the admissions office for my 2006 effort. I was able to learn a great deal from admissions about what they look for when selecting admits from a sea of qualified applicants.

Start a project with David! Mentor:
David
Accepted at: Columbia GSB
Industry Exp: Government, Military, Non Profit
Gender: Male
Background: United States
 
Mentor Details:   During my work experience, I had plenty of leadership and situational management; my applications highlighted my unique skill set, while explaining my academic potential (not having worked in an particularly academic environment). I am eager to help applicants from similarly nontraditional backgrounds who have overwhelming strengths in some areas of their applications and concerns in others (often, academic scores). I am excited to help craft applicants' pitches - and to ensure that theme pervades all aspects of the application. Look forward to helping you!

Start a project with Sam! Mentor:
Sam
Accepted at: Wharton
Industry Exp: Computer Related, Entrepreneurship, Government, Military, Non Profit
Gender: Male
Background: United States
 
Mentor Details:   Believe it or not, AppMentor helped me get accepted to my first choice school! Now I am on the staff to pass along to you the guidance they gave to me. In my opinion, when writing b-school essays, it is imperative one follows six key guidelines. Tell a story. Be concise. Showcase your strengths. And three other vital concepts. I will ensure your essays follow these guidelines! I have a varied background and therefore will be able to bring a unique perspective to any person's essays, but especially someone with a non-traditional career path.

I scored in the 99th percentile on the verbal section of the GMAT and I consider myself a grammar nazi. I will find every one of your grammar mistakes.

I spent 7 years as a military officer flying fighter jets. I have also worked for a small software company, for both US and foreign government non-profit sectors, and for two different technology/research organizations. I have a bachelors in Computer Engineering and a masters in International Affairs, and I lived overseas for over three years. I look forward to guiding you and critiquing your essays in your quest to attend ANY top b-school. I am here to help you get accepted!

Start a project with AFisher! Mentor:
AFisher
Accepted at: Wharton
Industry Exp: Consulting, Energy, Engineering, Government, Military
Gender: Male
Background: United States
 
Mentor Details:   I am a recent (2009) graduate of the Wharton MBA with a joint degree MA (writing intensive). I served as a member of the Graduate Admissions Committee in the 2008-2009 season, where I evaluated applications and conducted interviews. I am a prior military engineer who successfully transitioned to management consulting.